our class has been describing ahipara and his is my one
Ahipara
if you come to ahipara you see a wonderful school across the road
from North Drift Cafe. there are to famous roads one goes down to
foreshore where you can see the house’s climbing up the hill. If you
go along the road a bit more you will find the famous surf break
Shipwreck Bay one of the longest surf breaks in the world. when
you when catch a wave in you run around the point to White Rock
and jump off the rocks.
from North Drift Cafe. there are to famous roads one goes down to
foreshore where you can see the house’s climbing up the hill. If you
go along the road a bit more you will find the famous surf break
Shipwreck Bay one of the longest surf breaks in the world. when
you when catch a wave in you run around the point to White Rock
and jump off the rocks.
Ahipara is the best village in the world. it has everything you need
fish and chips a cafe motels and maraes and those are only some of
the things I'm telling you about. So when you go for a surf you can
go down to Dad's and have some chips and right across the road is
Liquorland so you can go grab some beers. for the kids just next to it
there is the general store so you can grab an ice block. a quad bike
ride down to 90 mile beach and watch the sunrise over the glassy
ocean reflecting on to your eyes. then you will see horses galloping
down the beach and tourists walking the length of New Zealand
right from North cape to the bluff.
fish and chips a cafe motels and maraes and those are only some of
the things I'm telling you about. So when you go for a surf you can
go down to Dad's and have some chips and right across the road is
Liquorland so you can go grab some beers. for the kids just next to it
there is the general store so you can grab an ice block. a quad bike
ride down to 90 mile beach and watch the sunrise over the glassy
ocean reflecting on to your eyes. then you will see horses galloping
down the beach and tourists walking the length of New Zealand
right from North cape to the bluff.
By Vinnie
Hi, I am luna X form belfast school . This is great because you told us that ahipara is very interesting. Have you ever thought about writing your work more vividly?
ReplyDeleteNext time, you can narrow the word a bit.
How long do you spend to complete this work?
Hi Luna, thanks. It took me about 2 days would you like to come to ahipara one day?
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ReplyDeleteHi vinnie it’s Millie from Belfast school, I really like you writing because you had good detail and I could tell you put so much effort and thought into it. The sunrise over the glassy ocean reflecting on to your eyes grabs the reader in. Next time maybe check your punctuation and capital letters and try fit it all on one page you could do that by making the font size smaller but otherwise I really like it a lot. What was the hardest bit?
Hi Vinnie,
ReplyDeleteI like how you had so much description in your sentences. You taught me what Ahipara has. Next time you should make sure that the words are in the screen.